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Narrator, “ he always talked about how the church gentified the ghetto of saint paul. Most of what we purchased in the 1950’s were somewhat mansions. They called it the “give all”, each member gave everything they had. It was sold to purchase houses like mine 983 Ashland.”  camera shot of 983 from outside.

 

change of season from fall leaves to snowfall camera on house through the change.

camera back in kitchen close up of mom baking a myriad of cookies and fresh pies

Narrator, “if you didn’t marry at 18 you would before 30. I remember them mostly as bakers and mothers. But they only made 200 dollars a month and often worked over eight hours a day.”

mom turns to a new island center of room, camera is in the doorway leading to the dining room. Fine art portrait of entire kitchen while mom is preparing cinnamon rolls from scratch with pans, xmas cookies and pies in various places in the room.

Rachael , “whatcha making becky?”

 

aunt rachal or “rachie” is leaving the front door. Rachael , “whatcha making becky?”. Camera fine art portrait from kitchen looking at rachie at the door, door closed. As rachie opens the door she says line. close up wide angle

 beauty shot of pastries and pies. Lower normal kitchen light afternoon, window adds light.

Narrator, “ in those early days she woke up early many mornings to bake. She gave so much to us. The church took everything she was and left her with severe depression. That’s what brought her to the kitchen.”

mom, fine art portrait of mom looking down, medium shot of entire kitchen in semi low light with natural window light. Mom, “oh just christmas tins for Karen and Walker”

Rachie, “more tins huh? I’ll see you tonight.” same camera position fine art portrait of rachie in the door

Mom, “oh just christmas tins for Karen and Walker”

, “see you tonight.”

mom still baking looks up at Rachie, “see you tonight.”

Rachie, “more tins huh? I’ll see you tonight.” 

christmas carol music introduces the church kitchen with women baking cookies and pies with look of the 60’s.

beauty shots of women baking from scratch.

 five mothers are on the large island next to each other scratch baking. Pan shot from left to right seeing all five mothers, all are looking at their hands while baking.  Straight on medium shot from hips up, no floor in shot.

fine art portrait still shot of entire kitchen from the right of room front near the door. Babies in bouncers five roaming the room. All the women look like the salvation army.  Big hair, cliche styles, they look like “mother”.

various shots of women baking to the christmas music.

Narrator, “ he always talked about how the church gentified the ghetto of saint paul. Most of what we purchased in the 1950’s were somewhat mansions. They called it the “give all”, each member gave everything they had. It was sold to purchase houses like mine 983 Ashland.”  camera shot of 983 from outside.

 

Narrator, “if you didn’t marry at 18 you would before 30. I remember them mostly as bakers and mothers. But they only made 200 dollars a month and often worked over eight hours a day.”

*idea perhaps the women can dance in modern or ballet movements to fine art portrait still to white christmas. The idea plays to the schizophrenia Shelly faces later in life. possibly the dancing stops and starts

think classic like 7 brides for 7 brothers

as the song end the women stop dancing and walk around the kitchen with scratch baking in hand, pans and flippers, spatulas ect. And as they walk the camera fades to dark.

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